Anyone want to give me feedback on this new garypagetwo song I'm working on?

Discussion in 'The Bar' started by garypagetwo, May 22, 2015.

  1. garypagetwo

    garypagetwo The Gun VIP

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    Yo. I picked up my guitar and started playing around a bit today, but I dont know...I used to post everything I made, but lately I just feel like my music totally blows. But Ive set myself a goal to actually learn how to play bass and guitar the next few months (I dont know notes or anything, just play random..), so hopefully things will get better.

    Anyway, here's the song. This is the FIRST rough edit; all instruments are recorded in ONE take with no practice, and the lyrics are just ad-libbed to give an idea of how the vocals might sound.

    Let me know if you think the recording has any redeeming qualities and you want me to make a full song out of it, or if I should dump it. And please be honest :) thank you

    Also please note: Im NOT allowing comments from Dawg and DarkFriday in this thread.

    Edit: Song goes verse 1 - chorus - nothingness, but a final version would go something like verse chorus bridge chorus

    Edit 2: Song deleted.
     
    Last edited: May 22, 2015
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  2. Mr Sinister

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    No
     
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    garypagetwo The Gun VIP

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    also im really tired and had a super shitty day so please excuse me if none of what i wrote made any sense
     
  4. Mr Sinister

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    Sounds really good to me, bro. I like it. :up:
     
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    gary is a paki? that sounds like a slurpee machine in the background
     
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    Did you bomb the math final? :pray:
     
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    That's a cool song title.

    I didn't really care for the rest of it though.
     
  12. garypagetwo

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    its your fucking belly churning
     
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    garypagetwo The Gun VIP

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    can you delete this thread please.
     
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    I think it's got potential, Gar. I vote you finish the song!:jazz:
     
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    Thanks man but I dont think so :p Back to the drawing board
     
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    Too late to the party
     
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    will remove in a min
     
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    Rap sucks, Gary. Stay with real music.
     
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