I feel the text I've written to my latest song is way too dark and disturbing

It's about MONK and Dawg and about them being gay but now that its done i think its too gross :/
I might start over and write more happy lyrics.

What do you guys think?

 

Do you have any friends in real life?

 

You seriously write songs about strangers on the internet who think you're a faggot?

 

Do you have any idea how fucking sad that is?

 

By the way, did you get a job yet?

 

Have you heard Schmoopy's thoughts on IED's ?

 

I think you should fuck off.

 

I liked the last lyrics about how RH Goatcabin wouldn't have sex with Dawg unless he put on 500 pounds.

 

thank you
here's the first verse of the new song. is it too disgusting and dark?

Here I am
with a message
no need here for salutations
Dawg and MONK are gay lovers
they like to have sex and pretend that they're brothers
no one on the board will ever know
what goes on behind closed doors
both of them are infested with aids
They never use condoms when they play




Dawg likes to get cummed in all places
but not in his face it gets stuck in his braces
Monk he likes to take control
close your eyes let him fill your holl
he's on a mission for submission dont fight back just assume the position
everybody needs to know
the dirty truth behind these two assholes

 

You wrote a song about two dudes gaying off?

 

Is it called Living On A Prayer?

 

I was going to call it MONK and Dawg are gay but now i might just scrap the whole thing

 

That song is likely the equivalent of chriza's spaghetti

 

Fuck you Oderus

 

shit, sorry.

 

I like it. I like your efforts and I don't think you should give up music. You're young and you should have fun, man.

 

[video=youtube;hmQY5CcgaSc]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hmQY5CcgaSc[/video]

 

You are terrible at writing, and rhyming.