Thinking about writing a novel here's a sample

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  1. jdwhatever

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    “I’m right here baby; I’m going to be right by your side.” She assured him.
     
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    splashwut
     
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    Go on...
     
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    Bonnie And Clyde.
    It's been done.
     
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    I liked the part where she assured him.
     
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    I take critiques
     
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    Are you accusing me of something
     
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    needs more commas
     
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    Until shit got rough and she divorced him for a rich beta male.
     
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    I accuse people all the time.
    I can't keep track.
     
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    Read ^^
     
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    Snort will be here soon to say this is the best novel ever written
     
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    :facepalm: yet again shiv not in on the joke :facepalm:
     
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    Lula
     
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    gwartney Is there gas in the car? VIP

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    Awful!